impermanent tenses 4
Swept
across news
sun helpless against
I
fly easy
wings rattle shame
You
got me
against the fence
Way
you do
shame on you
Elbows
shadow scaffolds
halfway up, into
God
among clouds
several versions believe
Songs
creation machines
dot aspirations/ blow!
Advertise
right buttock
keeping the score
Front
page morning
a sliding puzzle
People
look up
sex+civil+war
My
dragon statue
tacks the corner
Ready
to lie
in the corner
across news
sun helpless against
I
fly easy
wings rattle shame
You
got me
against the fence
Way
you do
shame on you
Elbows
shadow scaffolds
halfway up, into
God
among clouds
several versions believe
Songs
creation machines
dot aspirations/ blow!
Advertise
right buttock
keeping the score
Front
page morning
a sliding puzzle
People
look up
sex+civil+war
My
dragon statue
tacks the corner
Ready
to lie
in the corner
Comments
Andrew
j.
Well, Andrew, this form is hay(n)ku, for a start so I already had the form and I've written 3 previous in the series. I felt another coming on, is the first excuse. At the same time, I had been looking at an old poem of mine - a bit notey, had used a bit of a google search to get some words and phrases, then had reboiled it, couple of times. (You know what I mean.) But I still didn't really like it. Hay(na)ku tends to focus me so I went in there to refine away what I didn't need and see if it worked with the form. I got rid of extraneous words and went from there. Brought it back, so to speak.
Jill